A Well-Known Tale by Jahn
He was really mean and didn’t like when the snow fell, and he hated it when people were happy. Also he hated it when poor people begged. A spirit was at his house and he got really frightened when the ghost visited him. He hid under his very own king sized bed. Then the ghost went away and he was out of his bed. After 1 minute it went away. So after he wasn’t frightened any more.
Who is Jahn talking about?
What is different about this paragraph?
Ross Mannell said,
December 14, 2011 @ 12:34 pm
Well written, Jahn.
It seems in this version, the spirit appears then leave without S. speaking with him.
Ross Mannell (teacher)
NSW, Australia
Dylan.J said,
December 15, 2011 @ 4:11 pm
It’s a good paragraph, Jahn
Daya said,
January 6, 2012 @ 10:18 am
Very well wrote Jahn, it’s amazing how you have described the character without giving away the obvious. Excellent paragraph!!
Emmaneul said,
January 9, 2012 @ 11:47 am
this tale is really good Jahn